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simon先生的大作文寫(xiě)作方法
大作文寫(xiě)作,怎么樣將這個(gè)比較有難度的話題斬于馬下,試試下面的方法。
[導(dǎo)讀時(shí)間]
這是一個(gè)典型的“problem+solution”題型的雅思話題。
在結(jié)構(gòu)上非常適合4段式的雅思作文結(jié)構(gòu):導(dǎo)入+問(wèn)題+解決辦法+總結(jié),所以,在5分鐘的審題階段里,首先可以確定的是文章結(jié)構(gòu)。
其次是導(dǎo)入段里的全文觀點(diǎn)句,然后就是文章主體的兩段——“問(wèn)題段”和“解決方法段”的主題句,如果這幾步都非常順利,繼續(xù)細(xì)化下去,就要針對(duì)段落的主題句,寫(xiě)支撐它的2-3個(gè)觀點(diǎn)句。
也就是說(shuō)這是一般雅思寫(xiě)作前的頭腦風(fēng)暴時(shí)間里要確定的4件事:1.文章結(jié)構(gòu);2.全文立場(chǎng);3主體段主題句;4主體段觀點(diǎn)句。
當(dāng)然這說(shuō)的是最理想的一種情況。
在臨場(chǎng)條件下,根據(jù)自身的狀態(tài)和話題的難易度,可以省略4,甚至是3。
但是,對(duì)于想拿7+分?jǐn)?shù)的同學(xué),1,2是絕對(duì)不能略過(guò)的。
好了,對(duì)于這個(gè)話題,解讀至此,現(xiàn)在看考官的范文,看他是如何處理的。
[范文時(shí)間]
1. Cities are often seen as places ofopportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a largemetropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city lifefor the average inhabitant.
2. The main problem for anyone who hopes tomigrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higherthan it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higherprices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areastend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates incomparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is oftenpoor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transportsystems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy andstressful.
3. However, there are various steps thatgovernments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could investmoney in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost ofliving. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centresand promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduceboth air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, theintroduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the trafficproblem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas,by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressureon major cities.
4. In conclusion, governments couldcertainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for allcity residents.
[高分詞句時(shí)間]
首段:places of opportunity機(jī)會(huì)之地 in a large metropolis在一個(gè)大都市里 theaverage inhabitant 普通居民(注意是單數(shù)形式)
二段:cost of living生活成本 pay higher prices for housing為住房支付更高的費(fèi)用
suffer from social problems 遭遇社會(huì)問(wèn)題
poverty rates貧困率 poor airquality空氣質(zhì)量差
pollution from traffic交通污染 public transport systems公共交通系統(tǒng)
三段:social housing社會(huì)福利住房 ban vehicles from city centres 在市中心禁車(chē)
cleaner public transport更為環(huán)保的公共交通 acongestion charge征收交通費(fèi)
curb the traffic problem遏制交通問(wèn)題develop provincial towns發(fā)展省級(jí)市鎮(zhèn) reduce the pressure on減少壓力
四段:enhance the quality of life提高生活質(zhì)量 cityresidents城市居民
[分析行文的思路]
1. First paragraph gives a backgroundinformation and a statement
(導(dǎo)入段由“背景信息+全文觀點(diǎn)”構(gòu)成)
2 . In second paragraph , problems arestated one after another by using linking words(用銜接詞串聯(lián)起了3個(gè)觀點(diǎn)句,并在點(diǎn)出了主題句)
The main problem ...is that
Another issue is that
Furthermore
As a result
需要重點(diǎn)說(shuō)一下。
simon自己在這一段承認(rèn)了,故意沒(méi)有按照傳統(tǒng)的方式在段首擺出主題句,而是直接地接二連三用了3個(gè)觀點(diǎn)句,來(lái)講城市生活的3個(gè)問(wèn)題。
并最后得出了一個(gè)城市生活的總體的弊端“unhealthy and stressful”,這一句可以認(rèn)為是全文的主題句。
3.In third paragraph ,there is a topicsentence after that measures are suggested for government(標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的主題段寫(xiě)法:主題句+觀點(diǎn)句+其中夾雜1個(gè)栗子)
However + topic sentence
Firstly
Secondly + one example
A third option would be ( to do ...)
這一段的銜接詞,可以說(shuō)和第二段的銜接詞相應(yīng)呈輝,非別是“the main+another+furthermore"和”firstly+secondly+third“。
采用了副詞+形容詞組合使用來(lái)表達(dá)次序,沒(méi)有絲毫的重復(fù)感,并且非常流暢,值得大家學(xué)習(xí)和模范。
4. Conclusion paragraph is very short butcut to the point(總結(jié)段簡(jiǎn)短而切題)
總結(jié)段依然按照習(xí)慣的1句式,簡(jiǎn)潔明了。
[總結(jié)simon極簡(jiǎn)主義寫(xiě)作文風(fēng)]
simon曾總結(jié)過(guò)自己的雅思大作文4段13句模板,屢試不爽,可以用于所有的題型,所有的話題。
Introduction(開(kāi)頭段): 2句
First main body paragraph(主體段1): 5 句
Second main body paragraph(主體段2): 5 句
Conclusion(結(jié)尾): 1 句
這是我知道的唯一的行得通的雅思寫(xiě)作滿分模板,simon用這種他最擅長(zhǎng)的方式寫(xiě)了各種范文,字?jǐn)?shù)一般在270左右,很少超過(guò)300字。
可見(jiàn),字?jǐn)?shù)真的說(shuō)明不了什么,讀他的作文,最大的體會(huì)就是,真的是沒(méi)什么廢話呀!
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